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Offline Brian Golley

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my lyrics
« on: March 20, 2005, 10:15:26 PM »
these are the lyrics to a song ive written tell me what you think

chemical corner

chemical corner its where im at its where ill be
you cant give me the pleaseure that it gives me
i think ill go there at 5 o clock this afternoon
i hope they dont tear it down anytime soon

chorous
its my lifestyle that forces me to be bleak
when you look around make sure that you see all that i see
you havent been to that chemical corner of mine?
ill take you there sometime

verse 2
dont be a fool son you cant stop progress
not when it feeds a baby and cure tempory distress
look, theyre feeding themselves with some kind of goo
eat up son theres plenty for me and you

chorus
*first two lines the same*
they dont like that chemical corner of mine
all they need is time
*straight into bridge*
its what ive wasted
building this thing
i count the ways
i shouldve been big
but you wernt ready
you wernt ready
you wernt ready
ready for me

chorus
*first two line the same*
im not a post modern guy tell me what does that mean?
chemical corner is me

solo to end

this is a jazzy song in c and the bridge has a differnt mood and its in f (technically you could claim the whole song to be in f but strictly its not true. anyway im pretty proud of this song and ill try and post a recording soon.

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Offline Hanny

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Re: my lyrics
« Reply #1 on: March 21, 2005, 01:38:50 AM »
Look forward to hearing it, good lyrics :)
~ Make me feel tiny if it makes you feel tall but there's always someone cooler than you ~

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« Reply #2 on: March 21, 2005, 03:21:12 AM »
lol thanks everyone i play it for thinks it about drugs but i should explain the origins as it is a little abstract. up the end of my street the is a complex of mcdonalds and other such fast food outlets. diving past this one day my dad referred to it as chemical corner and i thought this was both incredibly and funny. anyway i sorta formulated this story about the feelings of someone who built the complex and tried to show a side of the story other than the environmentalists bashing these sort of people. anyway this might clear up a few misconcepions lol.

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Re: my lyrics
« Reply #3 on: March 21, 2005, 03:40:06 AM »
yeah i must say, i had drugs in mind after reading just the title. Sounds nice, i'd love to hear the music.
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« Reply #4 on: March 21, 2005, 04:56:22 AM »
i have to admit id have guestimated drugs too but after having a conversation with you about alcohol i realised it cudnt be but that does answer a few questions, its good when a song can be interpreted in diff ways anyway, appeals to a wider audience, like it tho :) yeh like to hear it with music also
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« Reply #5 on: March 21, 2005, 11:44:02 PM »
well ive just quickly nutted out the intro verse and the next bar will be the chorus. this is the first time ive used nwc to notate somethin so my skills arnt that good though anyway tomorow i hope to the chorus and nut out the melody

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Re: my lyrics
« Reply #6 on: March 23, 2005, 12:40:35 AM »
updated version with chorus lol ill do the melody tomorow

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« Reply #7 on: March 23, 2005, 03:41:14 PM »
my pc doesnt like whatever kinda file that is lol
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« Reply #8 on: March 23, 2005, 08:18:34 PM »
its a noteworthy composer file. you need noteworthy composer. ill post another song of mine, i just did a little bit then. ill post the lyrics here. this was supposed to be my year 10 grad song but it is essentially a bleak view of growin up (rather like video) so ill have to use another one of my songs for grad. anyway the lyrics are as follows

drag down with you

we talk all the time but i dont get much out of it
i still love all the profound thiings you have to say like theyll always agree with you

and that helped me through another day and i got through it
she uses a bookmark i think im in love

chorus
you're here despite of me not because
and its a shock
all the things i wanna say but cant my friends dont tell each other that

and these are the best days and i just wanna share them with someone
every year we get older but are still too young

and in ten years time i wont know any of you
who will you drag down with you, who will i?

chorus
instrumental section
chorus
key change
and who will you drag down with you?
and who will i drag down with me?

the nwc file posted is the intro and then the instrumental bit written. when i get round to it ill do the whole song with melody, same with chemical corner

PS sorry if this lyric posting is annoying i just wanna get some feedback on my stuff


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Re: my lyrics
« Reply #9 on: March 30, 2005, 01:17:39 AM »
any feedback?

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« Reply #10 on: March 31, 2005, 03:12:11 AM »
ive done recordings of drag down and chemical corner. there are terrible quality, im a bad singer, the vocals are too soft in comparison to the piano and u have to turn ur speakers up real loud to hear it properly. other than that they are great! lol anyway if u want them email me, but ur prolly sick of me talkin bout these songs so i will leave it as that

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« Reply #11 on: March 31, 2005, 05:17:23 AM »
btw my friend informed me she sat on her speakers when she was drunk and thats y it wudnt play thru her pc, u'll have to try me when ur online lol :)
~ Make me feel tiny if it makes you feel tall but there's always someone cooler than you ~

*~ Han ~*

...smoke...